Is this a good begining for a chapter? {Its long}?

Very boring and riddled with cliches, i only finished the first paragraph. And you say 'all because' alot which is irritating. Yes you were right about the grammer and spelling - that needs to be fixed. When u give a book to a publisher they often only read the first chapter and if that doesnt get their attention then your out of luck. My only advice is read MUCH more, preferably well written books (so that rules out any meg cabot!) because your writing style is pretty atrocious, and also to think of something to write about which is less predictable and unoriginal. Zzzzzzzzzzzz